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Meet Me Here at Midnight by =shadowsand:iconshadowsand:



Meet me here at midnight

I will be waiting for you

I wanted him to love me
So I obeyed him
And waited in the dead of night

She stands in crimson darkness

Waiting like I told her to do

I looked around for him
And saw him coming
Should I run or stay?

I can see her questions

They scream through her eyes

Does he see through me?
What does he plan to do?
I have to stay and believe

I speed up my pace

And pin her against the light post

I want to scream
I know what he plans to do now
And he will not be able to complete

She is warm to touch

Almost too warm, like fire

He is cold to touch…
Almost too cold, like ice…

She is fire…

He is ice…

She draws me in
Like mosquitoes to light

He repels me
Like cold winds to Luna moths

I must have her

He cannot have me

I will have her

You will not have me!

My fingers grasp her heart

My heart grows its wings of fire

I scream as flames touch me

What have I come across?

He screams and I run
I cannot look back
His beautiful face is pained

Where has she gone?
I need her even more

I cannot go back
But he has touched my heart
And its cold taunts me

I love her
My angel of warmth

I think I love him
But I cannot
For he is a vampire

Years pass by and my heart aches for her

But she has forever left me

Time has passed by
But I have forgotten
About that darkish leech
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Author's Comments

This is for a contest for Poes-Blood. It should be a lot of fun!

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:iconspirit-decanter:
The structure is complex but easy to follow. Good job! :)
:iconshadowsand:
Thank you!

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You can try to change, move, or persuade me. But God's already beat you to that. So sorry, but not really. God has His name on my soul!

You a radical Christian? Let me know here-[link]
:iconspirit-decanter:
you're quite welcome!

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Let's use the buddy system! You go first!

Member of *Anthro-Fantasy-club and ~Lit-Lovers and *Poison-Night-Pack and *Children-of-God

I believe in God! :w00t:
:iconadurna-rose:
The Vampires lines are broken up by spaces, it might be better if they are continues, like the angels, then you're changing points of veiw with the spaces. it would be less confusing.

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"If you can dream - and not make dreams your master;"-Kipling

[link] Aragorn is Mine! ha ha Bishie Stalker club rocks!
:iconshadowsand:
Alright, thank you for the critique! :)

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You can try to change, move, or persuade me. But God's already beat you to that. So sorry, but not really. God has His name on my soul!

You a radical Christian? Let me know here-[link]
:iconlunadeshadow:
I love it!

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[link] <<<Click.
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"I speak to you in riddles, cause my words get in my way..."
"It is time for the geese to head south."
"And then we'll understand....we held gold dust in our hands."
:iconshadowsand:
thank you very much! :)

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You can try to change, move, or persuade me. But God's already beat you to that. So sorry, but not really. God has His name on my soul!

You a radical Christian? Let me know here-[link]

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